PoemsWhodunnitPosted on April 7, 2014 Rustling leaves Dead of night It lurks and waits The dim of light The child knows The child fears The thing that lives But no one hears A flash of steel The red of blood A silenced cry And then he’s gone Image Source
paulmclem says: Like this one. A photo is so important to me on any story and you have a great one. Can sometimes give you 100 free words i.e. the pic adds so much to the story.
fatgirlinboxinggloves says: Chilling is the perfect word for this. The fact that it’s a poem somehow makes it more disturbing.
http://jesterqueen.com says: Grisly! (I love grisly.) I like how it could be either fiction or nonfiction, fantasy or horrific reality.
Christine says: THAT was terrifying. Makes me remember what it was like to walk home from a friend’s house in the dark. *shivers*
Oh, man-that was very creepy.
Thanks 🙂
Ohhh scary! But well done!
Random Thoughts Naba
really well done
okay. the photo. the words. i’m gonna have nightmares tonight I just know it!
This was goosebumps-on-hand creepy! Well written!
Very spooky, especially paired with that photo.
Chilling!! And PERFECT photo to go with it.
Like this one. A photo is so important to me on any story and you have a great one. Can sometimes give you 100 free words i.e. the pic adds so much to the story.
I love the middle stanza!
Chilling is the perfect word for this. The fact that it’s a poem somehow makes it more disturbing.
This is so chilling but so excellently told. Short yet sufficient!
~Shailaja
Grisly! (I love grisly.) I like how it could be either fiction or nonfiction, fantasy or horrific reality.
Ooo, love this! Especially the structure. It builds nicely.
THAT was terrifying. Makes me remember what it was like to walk home from a friend’s house in the dark. *shivers*
That is chilling and beautifully written. You made every word count.
Well done, the boogeyman returns. It is so nice to grow up.
creepy with the super creepiest picture to go with it!
Super creepy, Obed! The middle stanza is my favourite. And that picture is perfect.
Ahhhhh. This is chilling. Well done.
Very scary. Beautifully written fear.